Fiftymile Mountain
October, and I awake atop Fiftymile Mountain, southern Utah. We hiked up the evening before, up the great east-facing scarp that overlooks the canyons of the Escalante River. No trucks, no ATVs, you can only get here by foot, or horse, or mule. We camp near a spring, water trickling out of a pipe into a trough. There is a cabin. It belongs to Mary ... I don't know her last name, but she ran cattle here for years. Now the mountain is part of a National Monument and she fights the BLM. She's a tough gal. Three husbands. One fell off of his horse on the trail, struck his head on a rock. One she shooed away with a shotgun. The third probably had sense enough to just leave. The cabin is quiet. Aspens are turning gold in fields of sagebrush, an unusual sight. In four days we see two people, father and son, hunting mule deer the old-fashioned way ... walking, in dust-covered Filsons.
my new boots
fill with cheatgrass;
sticks to cows, too
return trip--
I share the warm truck
with a fly
my new boots
fill with cheatgrass;
sticks to cows, too
return trip--
I share the warm truck
with a fly
8 Comments:
Readers, sorry, my screen shows question marks instead of dashes, apostrophes. A problem with copying in from Word, perhaps! Jim
I always recommend people use a text editor [like notepad] rather than a word-processor for email and for postings such as these.
I've edited it for you [correctly I hope]. Word is one of the worst offenders when it comes to using proprietory non-compatible formating -- especially those awful curly quotes!
enjoyed your hike, jim!
Thanks, Gerald, for the good advice, and the edits. And gracias, Polona.
Jim
Hi Jim, and thanks to Gerald!
I really liked the haibun. It's a casual looking style of writing that I feel must have either been well-crafted and edited, or you just got one of those natural gifts.
I liked the way you broke some of the sentences up into either very short ones, or shortish sentences.
She's a tough gal. Three husbands.
I enjoyed the laidback haiku, that last line:
sticks to cows, too
It's perfect. I don't think just anyone could do that, and still have a good haiku part of the haibun! ;-)
The second and last haiku works perfect too, finalising the haibun.
Thank you!
Alan, thanks for the thoughtful comment. I have a journalism background and have always favored the haibun form. I'd like to think I can enjoy a haiku on its own merits, without the context, but I got into writing haiku after reading Basho's journals, and it has stuck with me. Enjoy the fall!...Jim
Thanks Jim, I will! Fall/Autumn seems to be starting today where I am. ;-)
I found the memories of your trip to fiftymile mountain while searching for info. It is a place that has always intrigued me. I must make a trip. Maybe to hunt mule deer the old fashioned way?
Dax
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