dying ash -
a hummingbird drinks
from sapsucker holes
a hummingbird drinks
from sapsucker holes
posted by Jim Tantillo at Saturday, September 16, 2006
Saturday, September 16, 2006
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3 Comments:
This is a rewrite from:
a hummingbird
drinks from sapsucker holes
in the dying ash
I've kind of puzzled over this one. The sapsuckers are what's killed the tree. Not sure how to make this one work better ... open to suggestions. :-) thanks.
Jim
Hehe
Because I get all comments by email [blog-owners perogative] I read this before the original post -- my first thought was that the ash should precede the hummingbirds -- and on clicking through to the original post found that was indeed the way you'd gone -- personally I'd probably move "from" down to line 3 -- then again I'd possibly try and make the whole thing in one line rather than three.
thanks Gerald, good point about moving 'from' to the third line. And thanks also for helping me think about this one a bit more.
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